In The Modern World, A University Education Is Essential In Order To Get A Rewarding Job

Band 9 IELTS essay sample

Some people believe that in order to land a good job one needs a university education. I do not agree with this view. In the current times, many people who earn high salaries lack formal education.

Times have changed. Gone are the times when one needed a degree from a respectable university to get a good job and earn a nice salary. Of course, many well paying jobs still require a degree. For example, one cannot start practicing as a doctor or a lawyer without an accredited degree from a medical or law school. There are several other sectors that still consider formal education as the main eligibility factor. That means a degree is still relevant and necessary in many fields.

However, in the current times, there are also many other sectors where one can build a rewarding career without university education. Take, for instance, the case of social media. It has become a major source of income for many talented people. Tens of thousands of people now earn a lot of money and fan following by simply creating content for the internet. There are several Youtube content creators who enjoy celebrity status. They earn millions of dollars by posting videos on various topics. Many of them lack a degree. In fact, some of them create content from their home using minimal equipment. The internet has also enabled many people to launch their own business with little investment. Self taught writers and programmers can now work as freelancers and offer their services online for a fee. They are also making good money regardless of whether they have a degree or not.

In short, I reiterate that in the current times due to the advent of the internet, it is no longer necessary to have a university degree to earn a rewarding job. Some sectors still require a degree. There are also several other sectors where talent alone matters.

Analysis

Task response: 9/9

The writer has addressed all aspects of the task. The opinion is clearly expressed and supported with valid arguments. There are no irrelevant points in this essay.

Coherence and cohesion: 9/9

The essay is neatly divided into four paragraphs. A variety of cohesive elements are used.

Grammatical range and accuracy: 9/9

There are hardly any grammar mistakes in this essay. The writer has used a variety of sentence patterns.

Lexical resources: 9/9

The writer has used vocabulary appropriate for the context.

Cohesive elements used in this essay

Of course, for example, however, for instance, in fact, in short

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